Writing Purpose: To Entertain
Type of writing: moment in time
WALT use our senses to describe
- (see, hear, smell, feel, taste)
- different sentence starters / some short sentences
- action verbs (crash / crashing, scratches / scratch / scratching, smack / smacks / smacking bounce / bouncing, sprint / sprints / sprinting, dodge / dodges / dodging)
- present tense (I am, he is, we are)
1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9 you go into that team.” Team 1 go to that square team 2 go to that square my team was split into two groups”. The air smelt so fresh and so yummy. We were in the middle. Begin! Whistle in my ear balls blew flew from every direction because we were in the middle and the other team were around us. We were pretty good at dodging, we were jumping around like crazy things dodging, ducking and speeding around the square. Grass tickled against the soles of my feet. I saw a ball whizzing at me at top speed, It flung into my arms I caught it WOOHOO. All I could hear was other people, cheering and telling the other person to go in.
Another person came in from the line. It was harder, more than one person had gone and I was the one they were all aiming at. One person was behind me, one in front and one on either side and at last, I was hit. The ball felt funny as it hit me. Sadly I went to the back of the line. I was about to get back in again when the whistle blew and we had to change activity.
Another person came in from the line. It was harder, more than one person had gone and I was the one they were all aiming at. One person was behind me, one in front and one on either side and at last, I was hit. The ball felt funny as it hit me. Sadly I went to the back of the line. I was about to get back in again when the whistle blew and we had to change activity.
Awesome details in your moment in time writing, Matilda! I love the "Grass tickled against the soles of my feet" sentence.
ReplyDeleteGood detail Matilda. I like the sentence, I saw the ball whizzing at me at top speed. Good story.
ReplyDeleteAwesome Matilda
ReplyDeleteI like your story
I like how you did it on just one game.
Well done
Keep up the good work
wow matilda thats great work and that was really fun :)
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